The Legend of R.E.D. Chapter 2

After receiving some feedback on my first chapter, I decided to focus on description and attention to detail, particularly with the environment and important characters introduced in this chapter of the story. I also wanted to try developing character personalities more through their dialogue and body language over simply "telling the reader" as I did a bit too much in the first chapter. Let me know how you think it works - if it needs more or if I went overboard - I'm always open to further suggestions!

I actually quite enjoyed writing this chapter. In particular it introduces the two "rivals" that Remus will compete against, as well as two more original characters, one of which I think will be quite fun to explore as the work goes on. I hope you enjoy the chapter as much as I enjoyed writing it!

(3am is probably not the best time for me to be proofreading a story, so sorry in advance if I missed something...)

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